Your introduction grabbed my attention and kept me reading the rest of the post. Your conclusion sort of left me with regrets on why I read the post; not because it was poorly written (it was not) but because you didn't have a stopping point. You left the reader with no after thought because you just provided the information but didn't give it your thought so that the readers could agree or disagree. Engage your readers instead of just providing the information. You could have concluded with a question or a normative statement to get your viewers goin'.
Another thing you could've worked on to make your post better was to provide evidence for your claims. You mentioned that the U.S. could save $187 million a day but no evidence or mathematical calculations leading to that claim. You also mentioned that you read an article but never provided the link to that article you claimed to have read. So work on citing your sources if you bring up any kind of facts.
Overall, this was an okay post and was worth reading 3/4 of it because the end could've been better. Keep blogging!
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